Proofread, proofread, proofread!!!!!

Going through Dr. Formans comments on apparently lacking essay, I've realized that proofreading makes all the difference. Line after line I see proofread, grammer, spelling, and such. I just have to many mistakes. More time needs to be taken as well to reorganize and further develop my sentences so they are clear and engaging. I feel I got the idea of the essay down, but through a reorganization of thoughts, much more proofreading, and more developed sentences I could take it to a much higher level. Thanks for the input Dr. Forman and I will be sure to take you up on the offer of help.